While listening, I had a few remarks:
- The transition at 2:20 I think is too sudden. Maybe add some type of timpani crescendo lead-in to the crash or something to that effect.
- The MIDI guitar strumming starting at 5:18 doesn't work for me. I could imagine how it would sound nice on a real guitar. I'm wondering if there's something you can do to soften that texture. A few ways I could think of are to strip down the strummed chords themselves to maybe just power chords, as well as varying the volume between each strum to sort of fake the accentuation a real guitar player would probably add to the strumming.
The rest of the song is nice and I don't really have much to say for it. Do you have any plans on recording a non-MIDI version of this song? Because if you did I would love to hear it.